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[英语课堂]英语写作,如何增强语句的表现力? [复制链接]

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在笔者还是学生时代,考试时也常常为英语的写作题目发愁。每当面对作文题目时,笔者也有很多话要说,也有东西要写。但就是写出来的作文得不了高分,用老师的说法就是语句都太平淡了。所以,当在网上看到这篇可以增加英语写作语句表现力的文章时,就立刻分享给那些还为英语写作发愁的同学。
    一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
    1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如:
Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
    2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如:
1) Weak: The team members are good players.
Revision: The team members play well.
2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
    3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中,把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如:
1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.
Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.
    二、多用语意具体的动词,保持句意简洁明了。例如:
    1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
    2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
Better: She compares prices and quality.
    三、尽量运用主动语态。例如:
    1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
Better: Charity has supported the organization.
    2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
    四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如:
    1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
    2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
    3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
    4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
   五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如:
    1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
    2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
    笔者没有进行多余的改动,也没有做多余的翻译,意在希望能给同学们传递原作者最原汁原味的对英语写作有增益的方法。也希望同学们能从中受益。拿到英语作文高分。
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